I’ve read through this scene about twenty times in various different incarnations but only when I was reading it aloud to The Boy did I notice this little snippet of joy

‘Nothing.’ A car came round the bend illuminating them in the bright, white, round headlights. Jamie pushed Maya behind him.

Why in action packed sequence when both characters are on the run did I find the need to describe in excruciating detail the headlights? Unless the headlights use special ions (geddit) to defeat the fey a description is not really necessary.
I am SMRT! Back to the cutting board.

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